can you find which one is written by a an American native?

stella   Sun Apr 20, 2008 6:13 am GMT
Anymmo.com - The first WoW Gold worldwide multilingual trade platform from gold farm factory to customer. Aynmmo.com is a real Customer to Customer platform and it leaves out the retailers’ profit. Furthermore, to ensure more competitive prices, through a price analysis system, we at any moment compare prices in more than 160 wow gold online stores and adjust ours to remain the lowest. We also adopt a unified price, namely gold price in the same server, no matter from which seller (gold farm factory), remains the same. Therefore, the price in Anymmo is the most competitive. As to service, you have nothing to worry about the communication with sellers. Anymmo provides unified customer service and bears final responsibility of the treatment of each order. Meanwhile, Mmosale International which established anymmo.com has experiences of more than 100,000 game gold services during 3 years.

Anymmo.com - The first worldwide, multilingual World of Warcraft trade platform, bringing the gold directly from the farmer to the customer. Aynmmo.com is a true, customer oriented platform that cuts out the retailers' profit. Furthermore, to ensure more competitive prices, we utilize a price analysis system to compare prices on the fly in more than 160 World of Warcraft online gold stores and adjust our price so that it remains the lowest. We have also adopted a unified gold price so that the price on the server is the same, regardless of seller. Therefore, the price in Anymmo is the most competitive. As for the service, you need not worry about communication with the sellers. Anymmo provides universal customer service and bears final responsibility for each transaction. Meanwhile, Mmosale International, which established Anymmo.com, has experience with more than 100,000 game currency services for 3 years.
Guest   Sun Apr 20, 2008 8:32 am GMT
The second one is American.
stella   Sun Apr 20, 2008 8:50 am GMT
can someone discover some mistakes in these two paragraphs(words or grammar)?
Skippy   Sun Apr 20, 2008 8:03 pm GMT
The first one isn't American enough :-P
Guest   Mon Apr 21, 2008 12:40 am GMT
It's hard to say which one is written by a native, but the 2nd one is definitely much better-written.

For example, the first "sentence" (unless "gold farm factory" is a well-known term in World of Warcraft) doesn't make a whole lot of sense.

The sentence "We also adopt a unified price, namely gold price in the same server, no matter from which seller (gold farm factory), remains the same." has a problem. It's not clear that "remains the same" really has a subject in this sentence. I'd also recommend be a "the" before "gold price" in this sentence.

(Note: I'm not an English teacher.
stella   Mon Apr 21, 2008 2:47 am GMT
thank you verymuch for your recommend
RayH   Mon Apr 21, 2008 5:17 pm GMT
The second one was written by a native speaker or at least by someone with a native speaker's command of the language.
stella   Tue Apr 22, 2008 2:52 am GMT
Thanks so much for all your suggestion and help!