Hi, I wrote somthing today and appreciate if you can give me some advices on my english writting and please rephrase the sentences if you think you can make it better. Thank you.
Topic: "What attracted you to applying for a role at Barclays Capital? (up
to 90 words)"
My writting: "
ABC is a fast-growing firm and awarded for Structured Products
House of the year recently. From you website I note ABC combines
the drive of a traditional investment bank with a genuine empathy
for their employees. I particular liked your culture. I would like
to work in a company "emphasises teamwork and a collaborative
approach". Additionally, ABC is an innovative and forward
thinking company, where I feel I would excel in a team environment,
and benefit immensely from the opportunities and high quality
graduate training provided."
Topic: "What attracted you to applying for a role at Barclays Capital? (up
to 90 words)"
My writting: "
ABC is a fast-growing firm and awarded for Structured Products
House of the year recently. From you website I note ABC combines
the drive of a traditional investment bank with a genuine empathy
for their employees. I particular liked your culture. I would like
to work in a company "emphasises teamwork and a collaborative
approach". Additionally, ABC is an innovative and forward
thinking company, where I feel I would excel in a team environment,
and benefit immensely from the opportunities and high quality
graduate training provided."